Because I like Spike spice, I'll mention that the only thing I picked up on even vaguely worth concrit was the abrupt change at the ending. I liked it a lot, since Buffy and Spike, even in these happier times, do need to remember they're living on the eve of an apocalypse - but I thought it could perhaps have been a little sharper and more abrupt somehow. Maybe some line breaks or shorter sentences to make it sparser? I don't know - sorry to be so vague.
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Date: 2006-07-18 03:04 pm (UTC)Because I like
Spikespice, I'll mention that the only thing I picked up on even vaguely worth concrit was the abrupt change at the ending. I liked it a lot, since Buffy and Spike, even in these happier times, do need to remember they're living on the eve of an apocalypse - but I thought it could perhaps have been a little sharper and more abrupt somehow. Maybe some line breaks or shorter sentences to make it sparser? I don't know - sorry to be so vague.